My Editing in Writing!

 

                 RT: DWH- Describe What's Happening

Before I edited the paragraph in my writing

After I edited the paragraph in my writing!

This week I have been doing free writing in my journal! Today I have been learning about Editing, and today I got a paragraph in my free writing and I edited it to make it more interesting! As you can see above the writing there are 2 paragraphs that are the same but edited! The first paragraph contains what my writing looked like before I edited it, and the other paragraph is what it looked like after I edited it. Where I have highlighted is where I did the editing for e.g: scared face - fear upon their faces. 

Week 7 Reading 2021

NL: Finding out how to figure out a words with clues

My Space Writing!

 Date:19.3.21

RT:To Describe characters thoughts and what their feeling

NL:To describe

My Space Writing!

(You look outside the window of my spaceship and I see…)

I look outside the window of my spaceship and I see a HUGE galaxy right infront of me!

I can see the earth and it reminds me of a swirl of wet paint on my piece of artwork.

I can also see the sun and it looks like a HUMUNGOS ball of flame it sets fire to my eyes.

Their are so many astroids just floating outside in space as if they were levitating rocks just being guided by a ghost gives me the shivers and makes me feel haunted~. 

Jupiter reminds me of my nana’s floor boards just screecching as I walk on it, it also reminds me of the time i tried to sneak and grab food while everyone was sleeping but all I could hear was

SCREECH SCREECH!!!!!!

Saturn’s ring reminds me of a hola hoop just swinging around me as if I was the center

Reading Week 6 T1! Space!

Cybersmart with Maraea and Ella!

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Cybersmart with Maraea and Ella!

 We have been learning about cybersmart, and we have been learning it because we wan’t to take care of our chromebooks and how to look after them and how we can stop hackers from getting into our accounts!

Environmental Changes LCS 2021!